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I think the main problem is that English is not my first language, so I can't see any grammar problem. I'll try to fix it myself, though.
About the structure, I look at the pages Elizhaa told me, and I can't see any too. It must be very subtle, or not. Novice problems, I suppose. I will reread those pages and see other profiles to see if I can identify the mistakes by myself. Anyway, if someone cleans up what I did, I would appreciate if that person could tell me what the mistakes were. I'd like to learn.
About the structure, I look at the pages Elizhaa told me, and I can't see any too. It must be very subtle, or not. Novice problems, I suppose. I will reread those pages and see other profiles to see if I can identify the mistakes by myself. Anyway, if someone cleans up what I did, I would appreciate if that person could tell me what the mistakes were. I'd like to learn.