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I skimmed past the Dragon Ball verse page and good lord you'd expect a highly popular page such as this to not contain so many grammatical errors on a level like this. These are just minor mistakes that I can't fix myself because it's locked. They're annoying me to no end and I'm just going to point at each and every one I come across for the sake that someone will hopefully fix them.
Summary
The first thing off the bat is that the title, instead of Summary, is just called "Summary of the plot". Pages nowadays just use the word Summary, so wouldn't it make sense to just change it to the one word?
"A kid name Son Goku grows up and trains to be a strong fighter and eventually grows into the protector of earth, along with his descendants Gohan and Goten."
Name should become named. The sentence should be formatted into "grows up, trains to be a strong fighter, and eventually grows into the protector of Earth along with his descendants: Gohan and Goten." The reformatted sentences already fix the problem with Earth not being capitalized and the colon going to descendants rather than Earth. And more of a nitpick, but sons would just work as fine rather than descendants, but there's not really any difference or need to change the word.
"Along the way he befriends powerful people such as Piccolo and Vegeta."
There should be a comma after way.
"He and the Z-warriors fight evil and powerful beings such as Frieza, Cell and Majin Buu to protect the Earth."
the W in Z-Warriors should be capitalized. "Evil and powerful beings" should be split into "evil, powerful beings". Also, for some reason Earth was capitalized here but not in the prior sentence; really weird.
Power of this Verse
"In Part 1 they had wall to large island level, with an outlier Moon-busting feat. By Part 2, the series made Moon-busting low-level as it debuted planet-busting in the first arc, with following arcs hitting star level by Frieza saga, and soon surpassing star and reaching solar system level with Cell and Buu sagas."
It's common knowledge that we capitalize the level of potency before the word level, which means things should be to changed to "Wall to Large Island level", "Star level", and "Solar System level". Moon in Moon-busting should not be capitalized. The issues with the saga mentioning is that they need to be labeled as "the Frieza saga" and "the Cell and Buu sagas", for some reason the is removed from both of their mentions.
"Despite the relative lack of hax skills, Dragon Ball is very powerful in it's own right and is considered a high tier Manga verse."
It's is being used wrong in this context, the apostrophe is actually just a way of saying "it is" or "it has". It should be its in this case. Also, is there really a need to capitalize the word manga?
"With the release of new material, such as Battle of Gods, Revival of F and the new anime series Dragon Ball Super, the franchise's canon has officially hit Cosmic levels in terms of Tiering System."
Cosmic should not be capitalized.
"It should be noted however, that the Animeverse (Which includes the two TV specials, all the original Anime series released between 1986 and 1997, filler included, including the infamous follow-up "Dragon Ball GT") actually has the Z fighters from Part 2 on a relatively higher level, with them reaching FTL reaction time since the Frieza Saga, as well as both secondary cano confirming Cell as a solar system buster a claim often disputed in various VS forums), as well a having Majin Buu destroy a whole Galaxy (albeit gradually) on a flashback presented by the Supreme Kai."
"Z fighter" should become Z Fighter or Z-Fighter, or just go back to Z-Warriors as stated earlier. You gotta keep consistency at least. "reaction time" should become reaction times. "as both secondary canon" should become as both secondary canons. The Solar System in "solar system buster" should be capitalized if we're keeping with the same format of the X level rule. Finally, I believe "in the flashback" was meant in the context of the final underlined fragment.
"Part I: Large Building level to City level between Pilaf Saga and 22nd Budokai Saga, reaching City level+ in King Piccolo Saga and ending at Small Country level+ in Piccolo Jr Saga.
Part II: Small Planet level to Planet level in Saiyan Saga, Small Star level to Star level in Namek Saga, reaching even Solar System level during the Cell Saga, and higher into Solar System level during the Buu Saga." Another moment of inconsistencies, all of the underlied titles need a the before actual title of the saga. At least the Cell and Buu saga have the decency to do this.
"Though there are a couple of more noteworthy instances. Such as Vados, who with her telekinesis can move multiple planet sized objects with ease. And Super Shenron who has has Multi-Galactic Class lifting strength through sheer size alone."
Outsite of the need of a hypen on "planet sized" to be captitalized, and the TWO hases on the last sentence, there are a lot of ways to fix this error. The main problem is that these contain fragments and/or have no commas. You can easily edit this without entering the wording that would need commas. This is how I'd fix it: Though there are a couple of more noteworthy instances. Vados, with her telekinesis, can move multiple planet-sized objects with ease; and Super Shenron, who has Multi-Galactic Class lifting strength though sheer size alone.
"Ranges from double digits to triple digits mach in Part I, reaching Sub-Relativistic+ to Relativistic in early Part II, FTL to FTL+ in Frieza Saga, and Massively FTL short burst and combat speed between Cell Saga and Buu Saga. With Part III being Massively FTL+ by the tens of quadrillions of times due to recent Whis' speed feats. Along with Fusion Zamasu who would've eventually become Omnipresent through turning into one with the universe and its space-time."
Again, the saga titles needs a the before their actual titles. Change "recent Whis' speed feats." to "Whis' recent speed feats." Finally, there needs to be a comma before Zamasu and who; and I suggest changing would've to would.
That's every single grammatical error I've come across. Considering how major this was, for Dragon Ball no less, this makes me concerned if other verse pages contain a plethora of unnoticed grammar errors. I've heard that the Dragon Ball page was just old and unable to be "properly cleaned" because of it being locked, but dam. Maybe tomorrow I'll take a skim on various verse pages just in case (I've already seen some other minor error sprees on pages like Mario Bros). And I leave with that.
Summary
The first thing off the bat is that the title, instead of Summary, is just called "Summary of the plot". Pages nowadays just use the word Summary, so wouldn't it make sense to just change it to the one word?
"A kid name Son Goku grows up and trains to be a strong fighter and eventually grows into the protector of earth, along with his descendants Gohan and Goten."
Name should become named. The sentence should be formatted into "grows up, trains to be a strong fighter, and eventually grows into the protector of Earth along with his descendants: Gohan and Goten." The reformatted sentences already fix the problem with Earth not being capitalized and the colon going to descendants rather than Earth. And more of a nitpick, but sons would just work as fine rather than descendants, but there's not really any difference or need to change the word.
"Along the way he befriends powerful people such as Piccolo and Vegeta."
There should be a comma after way.
"He and the Z-warriors fight evil and powerful beings such as Frieza, Cell and Majin Buu to protect the Earth."
the W in Z-Warriors should be capitalized. "Evil and powerful beings" should be split into "evil, powerful beings". Also, for some reason Earth was capitalized here but not in the prior sentence; really weird.
Power of this Verse
"In Part 1 they had wall to large island level, with an outlier Moon-busting feat. By Part 2, the series made Moon-busting low-level as it debuted planet-busting in the first arc, with following arcs hitting star level by Frieza saga, and soon surpassing star and reaching solar system level with Cell and Buu sagas."
It's common knowledge that we capitalize the level of potency before the word level, which means things should be to changed to "Wall to Large Island level", "Star level", and "Solar System level". Moon in Moon-busting should not be capitalized. The issues with the saga mentioning is that they need to be labeled as "the Frieza saga" and "the Cell and Buu sagas", for some reason the is removed from both of their mentions.
"Despite the relative lack of hax skills, Dragon Ball is very powerful in it's own right and is considered a high tier Manga verse."
It's is being used wrong in this context, the apostrophe is actually just a way of saying "it is" or "it has". It should be its in this case. Also, is there really a need to capitalize the word manga?
"With the release of new material, such as Battle of Gods, Revival of F and the new anime series Dragon Ball Super, the franchise's canon has officially hit Cosmic levels in terms of Tiering System."
Cosmic should not be capitalized.
"It should be noted however, that the Animeverse (Which includes the two TV specials, all the original Anime series released between 1986 and 1997, filler included, including the infamous follow-up "Dragon Ball GT") actually has the Z fighters from Part 2 on a relatively higher level, with them reaching FTL reaction time since the Frieza Saga, as well as both secondary cano confirming Cell as a solar system buster a claim often disputed in various VS forums), as well a having Majin Buu destroy a whole Galaxy (albeit gradually) on a flashback presented by the Supreme Kai."
"Z fighter" should become Z Fighter or Z-Fighter, or just go back to Z-Warriors as stated earlier. You gotta keep consistency at least. "reaction time" should become reaction times. "as both secondary canon" should become as both secondary canons. The Solar System in "solar system buster" should be capitalized if we're keeping with the same format of the X level rule. Finally, I believe "in the flashback" was meant in the context of the final underlined fragment.
"Part I: Large Building level to City level between Pilaf Saga and 22nd Budokai Saga, reaching City level+ in King Piccolo Saga and ending at Small Country level+ in Piccolo Jr Saga.
Part II: Small Planet level to Planet level in Saiyan Saga, Small Star level to Star level in Namek Saga, reaching even Solar System level during the Cell Saga, and higher into Solar System level during the Buu Saga." Another moment of inconsistencies, all of the underlied titles need a the before actual title of the saga. At least the Cell and Buu saga have the decency to do this.
"Though there are a couple of more noteworthy instances. Such as Vados, who with her telekinesis can move multiple planet sized objects with ease. And Super Shenron who has has Multi-Galactic Class lifting strength through sheer size alone."
Outsite of the need of a hypen on "planet sized" to be captitalized, and the TWO hases on the last sentence, there are a lot of ways to fix this error. The main problem is that these contain fragments and/or have no commas. You can easily edit this without entering the wording that would need commas. This is how I'd fix it: Though there are a couple of more noteworthy instances. Vados, with her telekinesis, can move multiple planet-sized objects with ease; and Super Shenron, who has Multi-Galactic Class lifting strength though sheer size alone.
"Ranges from double digits to triple digits mach in Part I, reaching Sub-Relativistic+ to Relativistic in early Part II, FTL to FTL+ in Frieza Saga, and Massively FTL short burst and combat speed between Cell Saga and Buu Saga. With Part III being Massively FTL+ by the tens of quadrillions of times due to recent Whis' speed feats. Along with Fusion Zamasu who would've eventually become Omnipresent through turning into one with the universe and its space-time."
Again, the saga titles needs a the before their actual titles. Change "recent Whis' speed feats." to "Whis' recent speed feats." Finally, there needs to be a comma before Zamasu and who; and I suggest changing would've to would.
That's every single grammatical error I've come across. Considering how major this was, for Dragon Ball no less, this makes me concerned if other verse pages contain a plethora of unnoticed grammar errors. I've heard that the Dragon Ball page was just old and unable to be "properly cleaned" because of it being locked, but dam. Maybe tomorrow I'll take a skim on various verse pages just in case (I've already seen some other minor error sprees on pages like Mario Bros). And I leave with that.
