Character Revisions

[ShatteredNightMares]

I'm revising the few characters I put up now because looking at them again they have some glaring issues. I started with my second strongest character cause I didn't want to tackle the strongest yet.

And so here is Dream Lastio.

What do you think? Like what can I do to make this better?

 

[Xmark12]

All that needs tweeking is simply more detail on the personality from what I can see. Everything else is fine.

Also nobody likes walls of text, there's a reason why people put spaces (like what I'm doing right now). Just a tip. XP

 

[ShatteredNightMares]

@Xmark12

Thanks for the info. I appreciate it.