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Thanks for your honest opinion. There is actually an explanation for why he is unaffected by conventional weapons. But since it's the first chapter, of course it doesn't come right away. There will be more chapters than that. I would appreciate it if you would follow me there and continue to rate my story.in the first part it sounded like a lot of Youtube stories (which I like) but I feel that the first chapter lacks a touch of expressiveness since in part it felt somewhat empty, without really existing danger, do you understand me?
If it were up to me I would let Valmon be affected by conventional weapons when he doesn't know that he is being attacked at first.
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